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Exploratory Essay

For this assignment, I had to write a research paper exploring how language and/or literacy affects a field of my choosing.

In the beginning, this assignment was difficult for me. I had trouble formulating a proper thesis and topic to focus on. This resulted in me writing multiple outlines of possible topics. My first topic focused on the language used by advertisements to appeal to consumers. My second topic focused on the internet and how its rising ease of access has allowed people all over the world to communicate and learn from one another. After realizing both of the topics in my outlines weren’t properly focusing on language and literacy I had decided to focus on a new topic.

My third topic focused on the language of Social Darwinism and how it has allowed for a rise in Anti-Semitism. I had first explained what Charles Darwin’s theory of evolution was. Next, I had explained how his theory was misinterpreted by Social Darwinists and twisted to justify harmful acts against those deemed inferior. Then I delved further into detail as to how that language was used by the Nazis to justify the crimes committed against the Jewish people of the time. Lastly, I had ended the essay by explaining the impact the language used against the Jews has had on them even in modern times.

After I had written the final version of my essay, I had to write a self-reflection essay. When writing a self-reflection essay it’s important to discuss writing decisions and the impact they had on the work. Sadly I had failed at writing a proper self-reflection. I had wrote about the writing process which was not what was asked of me.

The following is all the steps I had gone through when working on this assignment:


Outlines of Exploratory Essay

Outline one of Exploratory Essay

Outline one is my first attempted outline. The reason why it doesn’t look like a proper outline is that I had never written an outline in high school before. In high school, I would simply write papers and receive a grade based on the quality of my work.

At the time of writing outline one, I had wanted to focus on the effects the language of advertisements had on consumers. My thesis painted the language used by advertisements to be predatory and was clearly making a claim instead of simply exploring the topic. For this outline, I mostly looked for quotes that supported my thesis and how I could incorporate them throughout my essay.

Topic: How companies and corporations use language on social media and the effects advertisements have on the consumer/viewer.

Introduction:

Thesis Statement: Despite being a way to link your personal life to the web, Predatory language tactics used by companies on social media applications control what and how you think while simultaneously leaving you addicted and coming back for more.

Body Paragraph Zero (This was a quick add on so I had no time to change the names of the following so zero will suffice): Talk about personal experiences and my thoughts on social media while also talking about how I view people who use it.

Body Paragraph One:

Will explain how advertisements work on social media and how the companies behind them are able to properly advertise products that interest you

Article Title: “‘You Media’: audience as marketing in social media”

Quote One: “Such analysis suggests that the audience is involved in three moments along the value chain of social media: consumption, production, and marketing.”

What this means: Companies are able to use you, the consumer, to understand whether or not their advertisements are effective through the use of cookies and the data you so happily provide to them when you agree to the terms and services.

Quote Two: “The basic thrust of this body of work is that the networked architecture and interactive nature of the internet give social media corporations, from Google to Facebook, unprecedented access to mobilize ‘free’ audience labor for capital accumulation (Terranova, 2004: Ch. 3).”

What this means: By falling for advertisements, you essentially become a walking advertisement which in return, allows for gains in monetary value thanks to the free publicity you give off.

Body Paragraph Two: 

Will go more in-depth as to how advertisements affect the brain.

Body paragraph Three:

Will talk about a study conducted that was used to determine the “mediating role of psychological dependence between social networking sites (SNSs) addiction and attitude towards social networking advertising among a sample of rural students in South Africa.”

 (I will also have to explain the experiment in greater detail)

Article Title: “Social network addiction and advertising on social networks: A case study of rural students in South Africa”

Quote One: “There are 31 million people in South Africa who are currently using the Internet, of which 79% are estimated to be university students (Lin & Wang 2017).”

What This Means: Out of the 31 million people using the internet in South Africa 24,490,000 young people are using the internet. This means that a large portion of the population that is still developing mentally is at risk of addiction. Many young people in South Africa use social media applications, that are intentionally created in a way to get the user addicted,  stay connected with friends and family on the internet.

Quote Two: “There is a positive relationship between perceived ease of use and habit”

Quote Three: “There is a positive relationship between perceived ease of use and psychological dependence”

Quote Four: “There is a positive relationship between psychological dependence and attitude towards SNSs advertisement”

What This Means: These quotes are the findings found at the end of the study

Body Paragraph Four :

Paragraph: Will relate to me and how I feel as if I’ve become addicted to social media

Body Paragraph Five: I Will mention another study conducted in China

            Article title: “Social Media Generation in Urban China”

Paragraph: I Will mention an exploratory study pertaining to addiction and china’s youth with reasoning as to why young people become easily addicted.

Quote One: “Academic learning is the major task of adolescents. Academic performance is very important for adolescents because it represents nearly the sole standard deciding what kind of university adolescents can or will eventually enter or how they will eventually make their livelihoods.”


What This Means:
I’ll talk about the importance of education and how social media use tends to hinder learning

Quote Two: “the more adolescents use social media, the more social capital they will have.”

What This Means: Children whose parents have the means to afford the technology that allows them to go social also tends to show that they become more easily addicted at a younger age. Access to social media also tends to make children more antisocial and tired throughout the day due to long usage times when unsupervised

Conclusion: Restate the thesis and try to summarize the whole essay in a paragraph

The following is the feedback I received from Professor Rodwell for my first outline:

In an exploratory essay, you focus on what the experts have to say. You do not make a claim that you then find research to support. Your personal experiences are not part of the equation. 

Because you have done both of these things, I suggest you back off of your position and take a look at the larger picture of language use in social media.

FYI, this document is a collection of your notes, not an outline. An outline shares your points and subpoints in your own words.  

-Professor Rodwell

After reading the feedback I had been given, I had decided to try a different approach.


Outline two of Exploratory Essay

Outline two looks more like how an outline should look. I had searched for example outline structures on the internet and used the results as a template.

For this outline, I wanted to focus on how the internet has allowed people from all over the world to interact with one another. I had tried to incorporate how the internet has allowed languages to spread. This outline was also a failure because it wasn’t exploring anything. It was a generally understood fact that the internet has allowed for the spreading of ideas and languages.

The following is the feedback I had received from Professor Rodwell for my second outline:

Andre, your thesis statement is a generally understood fact. As a result, your essay is not exploring anything. You need to figure out what connections between the internet and L&L you want to explore. Or you can return to your previous topic, remove your opinions, and explore that topic.

-Professor Rodwell

After realizing that another one of my topics wasn’t satisfactory, I had decided to search for another topic to explore.


Final Version of Exploratory Essay

Realizing I had little time to formulate a proper topic to focus on, I had decided to focus on the the language of Social Darwinism and how it has allowed for a rise in Anti-Semitism.

Social Darwinism: A Branch of Anti-Semitism

Scientific and philosophical theories during the nineteenth century led many to seek the origin of man. Charles Darwin was able to put forth the theory that evolution occurred through natural selection and that man most likely had evolved through history from common ancestors. Darwin’s theory had been twisted to fit into the social aspect of human society. Social Darwinists, who misinterpreted Darwin’s work, theorized that the “Nordic Race”, or White Anglo-Saxion people, were superior to every other race. At the time many European nations had followed imperialism and had justified the crimes committed seeing as they considered their race to be “the fittest”. White racial superiority continued well into the twentieth century and during World War Two, the ideas of Nazi Germany and decades of white superiority allowed for a surge in Anti-Semitic language that has birthed even more prejudice and stereotypes towards people of Jewish descent. Throughout history, Jewish people have constantly had to deal with Anti-Semitism. “There has been no hatred in Western Christian civilization more persistent and enduring than that directed against the Jews.” (Wistrich 1). In western Europe, the hatred and bigotry against the Jewish people cannot compare to the hatred of other groups of people in the region. The language of Social Darwinism led to a rise in Anti-Semitism because decades of white superiority have fueled the flames of bigotry. 

In 1859, Charles Darwin, a naturalistic philosopher, published a book known as “The Origin Of Species”. In this book, Darwin was able to promote the theory of evolution. Through decades of research, he concluded that living breeding organisms, in order to survive and thrive in an environment, must develop traits that are best suited for survival by competing for resources amongst other organisms. Through this discovery, Darwin used the term “Survival of The Fit”. As stated by Darwin, “One general law, leading to the advancement of all organic beings, namely, multiply, vary, let the strongest live and the weakest die.”(Darwin 244) Darwin believed that humans were also subject to the laws of Natural Selection. He used this theory to explain his view on human origin, the view being that man evolved from primates through the passing of ideal traits and genes. Darwin’s theory of evolution was misinterpreted by some theorists of the time. Sociologists soon began to form the theory of Social Darwinism to justify bigotry and social inequalities.

Following Darwin’s Theory of Evolution, came the theory of Social Darwinism. Social Darwinism, in its original form, was the theory that White Anglo-Saxon people were the most evolved humans, “Social Darwinists argued on the basis of Darwin’s theory of natural selection that the best-adapted humans naturally rose to the top of social, political, and economic strata.” (Largent 136) Every other race of people that was not the “best-adapted” was considered to be less evolved. Social Darwinists were using the theory of evolution to explain the world around them in a social way. Sociologist Herbert Spencer believed in “Survival of the fittest”, or the idea that the strong rule over the weak. An example where “Survival of the fittest” was used was to justify colonialism during the Gilded Age(1870s-1900). This was a moment in history when the idea that one specific race was better than another seemed to really kick-off. Many Western European nations justified slavery, the exploitation of natural resources, and the spreading of religion. To them, the indigenous people they looked down upon deserved everything brought forth to them because they were simply “not evolved” as they were. Social Darwinism allowed for the justification for all the wrongdoings committed. This overall idea that one race is better than another allowed for bigotry to flourish during the nineteenth and twentieth centuries which is why it’s no surprise that bigotry would eventually reach a new height during the twentieth century.

Following World War One, Germany and the Allied Nations agreed to a peace treaty. Seeing as the Allied Nations won the war, the Treaty of Versailles punished Germany. Germany was forced to pay massive war reparations, reduce the size of its military, return any territory acquired, and accept full responsibility for the war. Germany had little to no say in what went in the treaty and was instead dictated by the Allied nations to agree to the terms given or risk continuing the war. The German people at the time believed that they were “stabbed in the back” and a conspiracy that Jews, socialists, and communists were behind the defeat was being adopted by the public. At the time Adolf Hitler had returned from serving in the army and was distraught with the defeat. He had joined the German Workers Party, later known as the Nazi Party, and was able to rise through the ranks due to his skills in public speaking. He used the anger and disillusionment of the German people to convince them that all the punishments they were being subjected to were because of the Jewish people. When the Great Depression hit Germany in 1929, Hitler loudly criticized the government and promised to return Germany to its former glory to gain power during all the hardships of the time. This ultimately worked and once he became Fuhrer of Germany he went against the Treaty of Versailles and started his attack against the Jewish people.

Hitler’s hatred for Jewish people was so strong that he enacted harsh Anti-Semitic laws against them. The Anti-Semitic laws prohibited Jews from working, voting, and occupying public spaces. Propaganda portrayed Jewish people as being evil, sneaky, and a plague to society. Many German people bought into the propaganda and began sharing Hitler’s beliefs. The propaganda had reached a point where just the mention of someone being Jewish set off a negative emotional response.  “…the simple word ‘Jew’ immediately triggered a set of associations, of hostility and revulsion…”(MacMaster 103) Jewish people were being discriminated against and segregated against in almost every aspect of their lives. Many Jewish establishments were constantly being vandalized with Anti-Semitic remarks and sometimes even forced to shut down. The language of Social-Darwinism and the belief that Jewish people were inferior to the white race had a detrimental effect on the daily lives of Jewish people in Nazi Germany. It dehumanized them. Anti-Semitic propaganda and the attitudes of the German people had stripped them of their identity and caused many Jewish people to see themselves as being inferior.

Once World War Two broke, Germany had begun rounding up the Jewish people to prepare for their “final solution” which involved the genocide of millions of Jews. The Nazi’s either killed a multitude of Jews in mass graves or sent them to concentration camps in eastern territories where they would be forced to work. The concentration camps tended to be packed with families who were forced to live in small, unclean, and sickly conditions. Many died from starvation and disease while others died from being put in gas chambers. Little to no empathy was given by the Nazis since they were blinded by hatred. Near the end of the war, the camps were liberated, and the world was shocked to witness the true barbarism and madness of Nazi Germany. The holocaust is used as an example to show how far bigotry will lead people to go. The treatment of Jews shows how far “survival of the fittest” will take us. They were treated as if their lives meant nothing and as if they deserved to die for being born the wrong race.

During the Nazi Regime, the Nazi’s had planned on creating a “master” race. The Nazi’s believed that being tall, having blond hair and blue eyes, and a muscular build was the ideal image of the future of Germany. In hopes of achieving this dream, the Nazi’s practiced eugenics or the practice of selective mating to acquire desirable traits in an individual. In order to achieve this, it was essential for Hitler to rid the world of Jewish people or any other undesirables. By killing as many Jewish people as he could, it meant that the chances of a Jewish person and a German person having a child were slim. Hitler was essentially against the mixing of races. “Any crossing of two beings not at the same level produces a medium between the level of the two parents” (Weikart 541) He believed that the mixing of races would result in the child being somewhat smarter than the “undesirable parent” and less smart than the German parent. Based on the ideas of Hitler’s “master” race, it can be related back to the origins of Social Darwinism in the fact that one race is perceived to be more fit and superior to another, therefore justifying Anti-Semitism genetically.

Time has passed since anti-Semitism was at its peak. Many people around the world have come to see everyone as being equal. However, that is not to say that it has been eradicated. There are still people who exhibit anti-Semitic behavior both in the real world and online. Many people deny that the holocaust happened and claim it was a hoax despite all the evidence and eyewitness testimonies centered around the time. The stereotypes of the past are still being made against Jewish people. A ton of the stereotypes still used originated from Nazi Germany which shows how impactful and lasting bigotry can be for human history. On the internet, anti-Semitism is on another level. The internet isn’t very regulated so many people can get away with saying whatever they want without receiving any forms of substantial backlash or punishment. People are constantly spewing Nazi rhetoric and bigoted remarks while simultaneously sharing stereotypical propaganda that paints Jewish people as being the enemy of the world. Despite how “inclusive” and “loving” the world is portrayed to be, Jewish people still are subject to the Anti-Semitism and bigotry of the past.

In conclusion, the language of Social Darwinism has allowed whites supremacists to classify their race as being the most superior. By viewing one’s race as being superior to another, it allows for the justification of committing crimes and the belief that the surrounding races are below you. Social Darwinism during World War 2, and the belief that the “master” race was superior to others, has led Hitler and the Nazi party to enforce anti-semitic beliefs on unprecedented levels. Despite all the Anti-Semitism of the past, in today’s times, people tend to be more respectful and care more about your character. Hopefully by teaching tolerance and respect to the younger generations, not only will Anti-Semitism slowly start to go away but maybe even the idea of social Darwinism will cease being a belief that puts individuals over others.

Works Cited Page

Demonizing the Other: Anti-Semitism, Racism, and Xenophobia, edited by Robert S. Wistrich, Taylor & Francis Group, 1999. ProQuest Ebook Central, https://ebookcentral.proquest.com/lib/ccny-ebooks/detail.action?docID=1144541.

“Chapter VII: Instinct.” The Origin of Species, by Charles Darwin and William Robert Thompson, Dent, 1967, p. 244.

Dennis, Rutledge M. “Social Darwinism, Scientific Racism, and the Metaphysics of Race.” Journal of Negro Education, vol. 64, Summer 1995, pp. 243–252. EBSCOhost, doi:10.2307/2967206.

Largent, Mark A. “Social Darwinism Emerges and Is Used to Justify Imperialism, Racism, and Conservative Economic and Social Policies.” Science and Its Times, edited by Neil Schlager and Josh Lauer, vol. 5: 1800 to 1899, Gale, 2000, pp. 134-136. Gale eBooks, https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/CX3408502382/GVRL?u=cuny_ccny&sid=GVRL&xid=367e87a2. Accessed 5 Oct. 2020.

Macmaster, Neil, and Neil Macmaster. Racism in Europe, 1870-2000. Basingstoke: Macmillan Education UK, 2001. Web.

Weikart, Richard. “The Role of Darwinism in Nazi Racial Thought.” German Studies Review, vol. 36, no. 3, 2013, pp. 537–556. JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/43555141.


Self-Reflection of Exploratory Essay

Like mentioned at the top of this page, I was supposed to focus on my writing decisions and the impact they had on the quality of my work. Instead of doing that I had focused on the writing process.

Dear Reader,

            This essay is about how the language of Social Darwinism affected Anti-Semitism. I talk about how the belief of white racial superiority has been used to justify harsh actions against the Jewish people during the twentieth century under Nazi rule. I also talk about how the language of Social Darwinism was able to promote bigotry against the Jewish people and how it is still a problem even today. My main point is that the language of Social Darwinism led to a rise in Anti-Semitism because decades of white superiority have fueled the flames of bigotry. I want my readers to understand how theoretical science was misinterpreted and used to push such disgusting beliefs. My readers are college students. As a result, it should make students realize that this radical way of thinking is dangerous and should not be followed.

 My original topic revolved around how social media companies use predatory language to get their users addicted to their product, but I felt as if that topic was very uninteresting for me. I could not find any sources that were relevant and most of them were outdated which caused me to scrap the idea.  I chose this new topic because over the years I have noticed more and more Anti-Semitism on the news and internet. In the beginning, I found it very hard to narrow down how the language of Social Darwinism affected the rise in Anti-Semitism and even questioned if it was best to just return to my original topic. I had to narrow down my research and connect the dots to understand how Social Darwinism created this idea of racial superiority and how it affected the Jewish people. That was when I felt more compelled to write this essay. I made a bad draft and then worked off of the feedback to make a better final draft. Towards the end of my essay writing process, I had realized I had exceeded the word count and page limit, so I had to rephrase some sentences to shorten the length of the overall essay. I do also feel as if my essay is somewhat informative, but I feel it is best for the reader to understand the background as to what is being discussed.

I found the peer review to be somewhat helpful. My partners were able to view my essay and inform me of what areas I had to work on. I was also able to review my partner’s essays which allowed me to find flaws and compare to see if I also shared those same flaws. I do feel as if peer review would have been better on Google Docs, but I do not think we were allowed to do that seeing as our professor wanted to see the peer review on Blackboard. Overall, this essay writing process went from stressing me out to slowly teaching me how I could make my essay better.

Thanks,

Andre Ivkovic


Summary of My Experience

Overall the Exploratory Essay assignment wasn’t that hard to do. I had made the whole process tedious for myself in the beginning. By not having a proper thesis nor topic to set my sights on, I had essentially doubled the amount of work necessary for this assignment. I had to do research for two topics I ended up not using and once I had found a new topic and thesis to focus on, had to do research once more. The whole process for this essay shouldn’t have been as difficult as I had made it to be.

Thanks to this essay I was able to understand what is to be expected from me in my work.

Course Learning Outcomes that addressed my growth

A portion of CLO number two relates to developing strategies for drafting. By creating multiple different outlines I was drafting how my essay would be structured. Feedback received from the outlines allowed me to see that my original topic was advocating in favor of stance instead of exploring a topic.

CLO number four, “Engage in the collaborative and social aspects of writing processes.” This CLO addressed my growth in the social aspects of the writing process. Engaging in the collaborative and social aspects of writing refers to peer review. My work was reviewed by my peers who offered valuable feedback. I also gave feedback to my peers. Reviewing my peers’ work allowed me to compare my work to theirs and see what I could do to make my work better. Back and forth discussions allowed me to build bonds with my peers and allowed me to see how others work and give feedback.

A portion of CLO number 6 refers to “locating research sources in the library databases”. At first, I was confused as to how I would find sources for my essay. After partaking in a lecture with a CCNY librarian, I was able to learn that the school offered tons of sources on the online library. This lecture allowed me to learn how to find sources and filter any sources presented to me. Suppose I wanted sources with full PDF texts I could easily filter out any sources that didn’t have PDFs. I was able to grow in the research aspect of my essay.

A portion of CLO number one refers to exploring a variety of Genres. “Explore and analyze… a variety of genres…” This was the first time I had written a self-reflection piece. I had never reflected back on my writing so it felt very foreign to me. I was so used to the “do work and receive a grade” mindset that I had ingrained in my head for four years in high school. Attempting to do the assignment and getting feedback on my work, allowed me to see what mistakes I had made and what I should do to make a better self-reflection essay next time.